Wednesday, December 29, 2010

January Moon

left behind

the news of your passing
leaves them silent
but there’s no one left to preach to
so a stranger gives your eulogy
left behind
because of years spent in memory’s effusion

life’s elemental scream
fades to a whispered prayer of confusion
a final exhalation
that no one hears

January Moon

shadowy fingers of night sky
unveil a swollen moon
with memories no longer to be recalled
their mother is gone

sharp angled barren branches
hint at this January moon’s frigidity
whose white hot passion
casts shadows on spray painted concrete
where I live

It seems to me that people are generally drawn to poetry that rhymes, so I rewrote the above poems to make the rhyming one below. Which do you prefer?

January Moon Rhyme

Night’s shadowy fingers unveil
A moon swollen with memories
Clouded recollection is impaled,
On the spires of winter stark trees.

News of your passing lingers,
Silencing those who knew you.
Your eulogy is given by a stranger;
There’s no one left to preach to.

Left behind, moon light raids
Years spent in memory’s effusion,
Your intrinsic scream fades
To a whispered prayer of confusion.

Final exhalation, this January moon
Hints at abysmal frigidity,
White hot quiescence carves a rune
That no one will ever see.

Shadows cast, their tales forgotten,
On dark empty streets of your begotten.


Mary Stebbins Taitt said...

WOW! Such powerful words--and the image is powerful too!

bluerose said...

Thanks Mary!

merrytait said...

I love this picture! I know I said that already, but it's super! Mysterious, evocative, heartfelt.

bluerose said...

Thanks! It was a photo I took while driving through the Smokies a few years ago. There was a lunar eclipse that night, but I dropped my camera and broke it before the eclipse happened, so I never got a shot of the eclipse. It would have been a great shot, since it happened at sunset :[. It was still light out when I took this shot.